Proofreading Invitations

Rsvp card.

I would add last names

You also need to write out the date and time. Twentieth of October two thousand and seventeen at four thirty in the afternoon.

I would rearrange the wording and remove the caps from the first lines like this:

Together with our parents

it is with great joy that we,

YOUR NAMES

request the honor of your presence

as we are united in marriage

date/time

location

I like @Kate and @goskell's suggestions for breaking up the intro part!!

Yes I'm so glad I asked! I was unsure about the into, @Kate & @goskell I will definitely be using your suggestions. Looks like I have some rearranging to do! Thanks everyone, I'll work on them a bit and add a photo when I've finished.

I absolutely love them!!! They're so pretty! We're having a pretty formal church wedding. Here's ours for another example.

ETA: I think your RSVP cards are great!

And I just noticed your venue is not a religious building, so you should avoid using "the honor of your presence."

You can use "request the pleasure of your company" or "invite you to witness" "invite you to share in the joy" instead.

I'm having a small wedding and this is our invites, which I made myself.

"Honor of your presence" vs other ways is used for a religious vs non religious ceremony, @goskell. It's not dependent on the building itself.

@FutureMrsLachney - According to Emily Post: The phrase “the honour of your presence” is used when the ceremony will take place in a house of worship. Honour is spelled with a “u” in the British fashion. For other venues “the pleasure of your company” is the traditional wording.

http://emilypost.com/advice/formal-wedding-invitation-wording/

In the US, you don't have to spell honor with the u if you prefer not to.

Dammit!!! We used honor when we're definitely not getting married in a religious setting. Ugh.

@Bee - I doubt your guests will notice, no worries! Its really not a big deal - it is not common knowledge. I just mentioned it because OP is still editing them.

@Lyanna - Are you having a very casual wedding? Those look like shower invites.

This is a very minor quibble and only grammar nerds would ever notice it, but technically it should be "It is with great joy that we, together with our parents, request the honor..." But it's clear what your meaning is, so feel free to disregard!

@jessiejv yes our wedding is casual and so is our reception, which we are having at our favorite bar. I like our invites and proud that I made them myself.

Haha @Kate hopefully the food and booze will get people to overlook this.

The time

This is what I saw: https://www.google.com/amp/www.topweddingquestions.com/blog/the-golden-rules-of-wedding-invitation-etiquette-wording-addressing-properly/amp/?client=safari

It's down a little ways in the suggested verbiage section. Mine say Honor. We're getting married at a winery, and it's a religious ceremony. #fuckit

Okay if you don't change the wording, these are my suggestions:

"Together with our parents, (comma)

it (no caps) is with great joy, (comma)

that (no caps) we request the honor of your presence

as we are united in marriage. "

If you could do the opening and the location in a script or an italic font, I think it would look good.

Also, I would increase the size of and bold your names, as well as the date and time. Lastly, this is just me being picky, I think the lines and design of the date are a little funny, so I would vote to just write it out without that format.

ps. I wish I would have known about WW and posted something like this when I did my invites and RSVPs. I completely forgot to include a place for guests to write their names on the RSVP's and am now having to do process of elimination and ask people on Facebook to write their names when they send them back. Not exactly what I intended on... so this post was a great idea!